Comments on: Words Break My Bones

By: spider man

spider man — Mon, 03 Mar 2008 14:31:19 +0000

well i guess thats settled.

By: Anonymous

Anonymous — Mon, 03 Mar 2008 02:38:52 +0000

yeah, i was actually referring to the critics of Steel.
sorry about that. and yes, i have no right.

By: spider man

spider man — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 15:02:43 +0000

well… that is why i said personally, because it is my personal opinion… and uhm… who is steel? i don’t recall criticizing him at all, i asked him to shush, period. i really wouldn’t call that history. besides, how can you be so sure with whatever history i have? i don’t believe you have the right to make such claims.

By: Shaider

Shaider — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 14:46:17 +0000

but there is history involved. you wouldn’t be that blatant if it wasn’t Steel you were criticizing.

By: spider man

spider man — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 14:04:06 +0000

hate… hmmm, i definitely wouldn’t call it that, cause hate, for me personally is a word that has a deep meaning. It would require, well at least for me, a history, a real huge reason for me to hate someone. I believe that garath feels the same way, i believe he is just scrutinizing, period.

By: shuma gorath

shuma gorath — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 13:59:36 +0000

hay nako, spiderman… to quote SOMEONE (well i edited the names as well)

“shuma gorath/goneunderscorestreaking is a different person. Don’t view us as one.”

By: Shaider

Shaider — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 13:55:09 +0000

man, you people could really scrutinize when coupled with hatred.

By: spider man

spider man — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 13:53:41 +0000

shuma garath. if i didn’t know any better, i would say you are no shuma garath, but rather, you are gone_streaking in disguise!!! could this be the rebirth of war???

By: shuma gorath

shuma gorath — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 13:36:57 +0000

FYI 34th dimension via string theory. read it up, it’ll help

By: shuma gorath

shuma gorath — Sun, 02 Mar 2008 13:33:59 +0000

hahaha spot on. and i think his last paragraph gives him away.

“I respect your excessive vileness. But, I am not telling you that I have given up. Remember, you mar people’s feelings.”

It really lacks coherence and cohesion. It’s like he doesn’t know how to use these words properly. for example, his respect for “excessive vileness” is followed by the word “but” which is in turn followed by “i have not given up”. uhh… when you use “but”, it is often preceded by a phrase that the succeeding phrase tries to negate/reciprocate. a recognition of someone’s “vileness” followed by the act of “not giving up” seems off, especially considering the fact that he doesn’t state where he is giving up from. something like “you are commendable in your skills in argument and debate, but i won’t give up in this debate just yet” sounds infinitely simpler YET better. then, he follows this “warning” that he hasn’t given up with a “reminder” that he “mars people’s feelings”. first of all, mar is not an appropriate word at all. mar means to DISFIGURE. how can you disfigure “feelings”, when “feelings” are abstract in the first place?! do you go to the 34th dimension to do that? anyway, yes, mar somehow related to “hurt”, but the context is so wrong, that the fact that steel is trying to over-complicate his sentences results to hilarity for readers like me. second, the transition between those two sentences is non-existent. he “warns” iron man that he’s not giving up, but “reminds” him that he hurts people’s feelings. WHAT IS THE CONNECTION?! maybe there can be one if a transitional sentence is included! something like “you hurt people’s feelings, but let me remind you that i will always stand up for justice, and defend people from your insulting comments”, in my opinion, is also better.

so in summary the flow of his last paragraph is:
i respect you but i am not giving up (from what?! the first sentence is about respect, not a ‘competition’, which, mind you, was never defined in the first place) so i’d just like to remind you that you disfigure other people’s feelings.
*honestly, the first 2 sentences don’t sound so far-fetched when stripped to the very core, but the inclusion of the third sentence is pure comedy.

so in conclusion, the use of a thesaurus, steel, won’t help the fact that you aren’t very adept in speaking the language. with my huge-ass eye, i see these things